It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (eg.dinosour,dodo,..). There are no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The natural world has been witnessing the disappearance of some creatures that are regarded as a natural election. Some scientists argue that whether to inhibit the annihilation of wild animals or not. In my opinion, I do agree that communities should have protective actions for creatures and their places for wildlife in an ecosystem because of the following reasons.
Firstly
, the extinction
rate
today or the modern one is not based on natural law.
This
rate
is estimated significantly higher than the expected
rate
. The increased
rate
does not allow for ecosystems to recover or other
species
to occupy vacant niches. A good example of
this
in New Zealand is the kereru. Kereru is the only bird to be able to swallow seeds of native trees and disperse them. The elimination of
this
may result in the loss of many native trees. Due to unprecedented events
such
as a large-scale fire, could cause a terrible status. Particularly, a small population size of some
species
could be vulnerable to annihilation.
Secondly
, the main reason for modern one is human impact as opposed to natural phenomena. Human activities for commercial purposes included over-exploitation, water pollution, climate change cause the loss of habitats and the development of
species
.
For instance
, the zoo is the limited habitat for animal
species
that have become gradually less wild than others living in the forest.
Therefore
, creatures should not be under the threat of extinction because people are provided with many indispensable services including clean air, water, food and medical sources, commercial, aesthetic and recreational benefits coming from the natural world. In conclusion, it is undeniable that human life has been maintained by a natural world so the preservation of endangered
species
should be more concerned. It is predicted that the extinction will come back to be a natural event and not be in relation to human activities.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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