Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed?

These days numerous people want to start their own
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and they don't want to work under someone else,
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there are both pros and cons to
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why they decided to do their own work other than
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job . Let begin with the advantage of
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. one of the main positive reason is that you are your own boss. what
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mean by that
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don't need to answer
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anyone you and you make your own
dission
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mission
decision
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Secondly
, Folks want financial security when they have their own start-up.
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, Top richest people in the world have
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thing they all are
businessman
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no one can enough money through their job so that
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people choose to be
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so they are financially safe. Turning to the other side of
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, there is no guarantee for
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success
in your start-up, to be more precise, there is no security of future
such
as Numerous
business
fail because of the low investment, no experience or less marketing
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have dealt a killer blow for your
business
.
On the other hand
, your social life affect badly that cause you serious health problem and you have to face stress and
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anxiety
owing of
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. In conclusion
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Follow your dream
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easy. you need to weigh up the pros of a better lifestyle, success and so on, and the cons of no security of future, your
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occupided
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occupied
by your
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your Personally I believe the benefits in terms of personal growth eventually outweigh any negatives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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