you and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. you are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture.

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Dear Danny, I am writing

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letter to complain about some furniture that you have in your place. I am Nari Hwang and a tenant living in one of your properties. My parents and I are living near Stadium Station. We met to sign a rental contract a week ago at your office. I have to tell

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suggest something about bad condition

furnitures

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furniture

types of furniture

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. First of all, there

are

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a dining

table

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and

chairs

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living

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the living

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room. But we are living 6 people together so we don't feel that

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table

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size is fit and suitable for us.

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threr

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there

are only 4

chairs

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and one of the

chairs

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broke down. Three

chairs

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are missing so we need 3

chairs

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more.

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a small

table

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and missed

chairs

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, we haven't

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dinner time together for a

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. We need a big

table

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and more

chairs

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as soon as possible. As you know, Family time is so precious. I hope you are going to purchase some

furnitures

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that we want as soon as possible. I am looking for your answer soon, If you have any questions, just let me know. your faithfully, Nari Hwang

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

196 words

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you and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. you are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many employees can now do their work from home using modern technology. However, this change may only benefit workers, not the employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

more and more people are moving to big cities why do you think this is happening? is this a positive or negative development?