2. Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it’s unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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sports men

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and women take home great fortune compared to other forms of

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; Some individuals argue that these are

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fortune.

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largely depends on:talents, skills, abilities and individual efforts towards a given sport.

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to individual's

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sports men

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and women earnings;

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individual

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can be involved in promotional

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which

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inturn

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contribute to increased earnings.

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and women representing countries like in the current Olympic championship.

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being a talent it can

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be used as a great source of income.

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personal are half baked in terms of education,

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,They spend limited time in class.

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is a lucrative field of occupation which should

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like any other career.

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education should be provided for sporting persons too.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

192 words

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2. Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it’s unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people think that museums and galleries should only show work from local artists rather than work from other countries. Do you agree?

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

You recently stayed at a hotel conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include • Where you stayed • What the problems were • How they can fix your complaint.

Some people think that large international sporting events only brings drawbacks, and that it is not worth hosting them. Do you agree or disagree?