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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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If we observe the current trend of parenting, we can see that every parent wants their child to be the best at everything. The
kids
 these days are way
more busy
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 in doing and learning new skills in comparison with the previous generation. I personally believe that
competition
 among
kids
 creates
alot
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a lot
 of pressure on them and they can never be as fruitful
adult
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 as in comparison with the
adult
 who was taught to co-operate from a very young age.
Lets
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 discuss
about
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competition
 among children. Some people feel that if they teach their child to compete from a young age, they will be ready to survive in
this
competetive
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competitive
 world as an
adult
. People need to understand that healthy
competition
 is good for
the
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society but a
competition
 where
one
 person thinks bad for the other or
envys
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envy
envoys
envies
 other, is never an option. In my opinion, I feel the sense of
competition
 in
kids
 will not be beneficial for them when they turn adults because they will think of every single person who is their colleague or a friend as a
competitior
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competitor
 and they will constantly try to
over power
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 them. If by chance they don't succeed in doing so,
then
 they may end up feeling
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frustrated
 and it can lead to depression.
On the other hand
, there are people who teach their
kids
 to be
co-operative
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 with their friends and learn to share and focus on
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teamwork
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team work
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 rather than competing with them. I truly believe that a kid grown up in
such
 an atmosphere will positively think of everyone as a friend and it can help them to communicate better and be
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a lot
 more social as an
adult
. Our society needs
such
 kind of adults who helps
one
 another in every situation and never think of excelling alone and it is only possible if we teach our
kids
 to co-operate with each other
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 a very young age.
For instance
, in a cricket match
one
 side losses and the other side wins, but if we observe closely, every single time
one
 thing will be constant i.e., the team that plays better as a group wins the match. A player may score a century in a match but if his
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teammates
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team mates
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 do not perform well, their side will
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loose
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 the match every single time.
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  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
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  • social skills
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