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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Food
 is one of the essential
requirement
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 of all living creatures and to obtain good quality nutritious
food
 is everyone’s basic right. Companies and organization’s transport
food
 around the globe to distribute to the
consumers
. Few individuals think utilize
food
items
 available in the local habitat is good for the environment, as well as it helps to achieve financial stability. I agree with
this
 view and in the following essay, I will explain why I support
this
 point of view. Transport
food
 products across the world mainly depend on petroleum or
diesel based
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 vehicles which can cause global warming. Transporting
food
items
 can take up to months to reach from the producing region to
consumers
 destination. During the transportation process, tons of fossil fuels will be burned and it emits carbon monoxide and other microparticles, and it causes one of the main
reason
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 for global warming. But at the same time if people start to utilize locally available products the transport requirement gets reduced and eventually, it will help to reduce global warming and increase the stability of the environment. The majority of the local
food
items
 can reach the customers swiftly from the farms to
end users
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 because both lives in the same geographical area.
On the contrary
food
 transports in
long
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distance
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 require to preserve properly by preservation methods or chemical
process
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,
otherwise
 these
good
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goods
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 may spoil quickly, and
by
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doing
this
 will automatically increase the price of the
food
 products.
Secondly
 shipping from
long
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distance
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 is a costly operation and end of the day
consumers
 have to pay for the transportation cost. But on the other side, locally grown
food
items
 do not require much transportation cost.
For example
, transporting goods from Japan to
US
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 will be more costly compared to transporting
inside
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US
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. There are numerous advantages for homegrown
food
items
 especially for supporting the environment and as well as economically to the
consumers
. Based on the arguments outlined above I strongly support the benefits of locally grown
food
items
 are much better than transported
items
 from different regions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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