In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the Internet and smart phones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

Nowadays the number of
people
working from
home
has been increasingly popular. Due to
technological
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,breakthrough more and more
people
have
working
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to work

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with computers, the internet and smartphone from any part of the world.
This
type of development can lead to many advantages and disadvantages.
This
essay will discuss the pros and cons
this
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development. On the one hand, working from
home
can be
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a

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safe, pleasured and comfortable experience once
people
can both save money and make their own schedule.
For example
, a person who makes the job in own house neither waste
time
on the traffic nor waste
time
with clothes and cosmetics,
in other words
, she can save money and at the same feels comfortable in the comfort of her house. The more saved money, the more opportunities to spend it on trips and leisure
time
. But
on the other hand
, when
people
work
from
home
they can make the house an extension of the
work
which leads to a vicious circle, damaging the mental health and social life.
For instance
, individuals who do not have a fixed schedule with restrictions and moderation about the job can
work
in burnout and
this
is harmful to the health resulting in disorders like depression, anxiety and absence of spare
time
to enjoy with family and friends. In conclusion, having an occupation which permits to
work
everywhere has upsides and downsides. It is necessary a balance to have the better of two worlds.
This
essay discussed the positives and negatives of working from
home
.

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