IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the Internet and smart phones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

#people #travel #place #work #computers #internet #phones #home #development
Nowadays the number of
people
 working from
home
 has been increasingly popular. Due to
technological
Replace the word
technology
show examples
,breakthrough more and more
people
 have
working
Change the verb form
to work
show examples
 with computers, the internet and smartphone from any part of the world.
This
 type of development can lead to many advantages and disadvantages.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and cons
this
Change preposition
of this
show examples
 development. On the one hand, working from
home
 can be
Correct article usage
a
show examples
safe, pleasured and comfortable experience once
people
 can both save money and make their own schedule.
For example
, a person who makes the job in own house neither waste
time
 on the traffic nor waste
time
 with clothes and cosmetics,
in other words
, she can save money and at the same feels comfortable in the comfort of her house. The more saved money, the more opportunities to spend it on trips and leisure
time
. But
on the other hand
, when
people
work
 from
home
 they can make the house an extension of the
work
 which leads to a vicious circle, damaging the mental health and social life.
For instance
, individuals who do not have a fixed schedule with restrictions and moderation about the job can
work
 in burnout and
this
 is harmful to the health resulting in disorders like depression, anxiety and absence of spare
time
 to enjoy with family and friends. In conclusion, having an occupation which permits to
work
 everywhere has upsides and downsides. It is necessary a balance to have the better of two worlds.
This
 essay discussed the positives and negatives of working from
home
.
Submitted by larissafelipin on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • virtual collaboration
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • flexibility
  • commuting
  • isolation
  • disconnect
  • coordination
  • boundaries
  • distractions
  • remote work
What to do next:
Look at other essays: