Many people believe that a person’s culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that it has only minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is considered by many that, individual’s homeland plays an essential
role
in developing their
culture
,
on the contrary
, many argue that
,
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the birth
country
has minimal impact on
this
. In my opinion, I believe that home
country
and surroundings have a vital impact in defining pupil’s
culture
. It is commonly believed that social principles start to develop based on the birthplace and society they live in. Observing power of humans are exceptional, a newborn start analyzing and add the same to memory, how people react or approach a case, and the same will be applied in his turn, because of
this
, each individual’s, friends, relatives and neighbours play a critical
role
in it.
Additionally
, during the early school days, students were taught about moral
values
based on curriculum and it varies from
country
to
country
.
For instance
, the child of an Indian immigrant family in Europe will most likely follow Hinduistic worship ways rather than Christian. On the other side, it is argued by many that, the home countrys'
role
in people's
culture
is negligible. As per their point of view, humans’ adaptability is supremely high, because of
this
everyone’s cultural
values
may change based on the circumstances. To illustrate, students who moved overseas for higher education quickly adopt the
values
of the foreign
country
or people forced themselves to change based on the organization they work for. In conclusion, different peoples have different opinions about the birth countries’ involvement in building individual’s cultural
values
. In my point of view, the native place has a vital
role
in defining everyone’s
culture
.

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