Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often thought that it is more advantageous to live in urban
areas
than in the outskirts. In
this
essay, I would be stating the reasons why it is more beneficial to reside in commercial than rural
areas
before giving the conclusion. A city offers a lot of opportunities not only for the young but
also
for the adults. It boasts of its prestigious institutions as well as competitive job offers. A good example is that in the Philippines, the four
world
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accredited universities namely,
University
of the Philippines, Ateneo de Manila
University
, De La Salle
University
, and
University
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of Sto. Tomas, are all located in well-known
areas
.
Consequently
, the graduates can opt to work there since the salary rates are higher compared to those employed in
the
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apply

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rural
areas
.
Furthermore
, there are more facilities present. There will always be shopping malls, restaurants, amusements
centers
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centres

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, parks, libraries, and good transportation
system
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systems

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around.
For instance
, you would immediately find a commercial establishment within your hometown – be it a supermarket or a small retail store.
In addition
, there are various options for commuting like cabs,
jeepeneys
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jeepneys

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, motors, buses, and even tricycles, even if there is a higher rate
for
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of

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air pollution compared with suburban
areas
. In conclusion, people commonly believed that residing in metropolitan
areas
gives more advantages since there these locations are progressive.
Also
, it provides more amenities for individuals that outweigh the minimal hindrances. In my opinion, I strongly agree that cities offer a better way of living because opportunities are always present.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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