Many believe that living in a city offers greater benefits compared to life in COUNTRISIDE. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Several
people
advocate that the residents of urban areas enjoy
better
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life than the dwellers of rural settings. The advantages and disadvantages of both lifestyles are comparable but I contend that the positives of residence in the countryside are far more than the metropolitans.
To begin
with, the merits of urban living, as cities have state-of-the-art infrastructures, for ,example hospitals, schools, universities and highways, so
people
can enjoy the modern lifestyle.
Furthermore
, metropolitans are the hub of commercial activities,
that is
why the opportunities for
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the job
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job
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jobs

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are reasonably more than
remote
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in remote

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areas.
On the other hand
, urban settlers face enormous social, environmental and legal issues
such
as the increased crime rates, sanitation problems and pollution due to over-population. Regarding life in the countryside, the environment is much cleaner, meanwhile,
people
can get easily fresh organic food.
For instance
, individuals can grow
the
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vegetables and fruit in their own home gardens because houses are quite big in small towns.
On the contrary
, villagers have poor access to healthcare and educational facilities and markets, so in the case of any medical emergency,
people
rush to cities to get treatments.
Moreover
,
people
could not earn a reasonable amount of money in order to spend the standardized lifestyle because of the communication challenges in remote localities. In conclusion, even though the
people
of cities can avail better modern facilities, at the stake of their health due to poor living conditions. In sharp contrast, rural residents can have
better
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environment but few opportunities for education and
employments
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employment

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.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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