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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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There is no doubt that those days we see the bloggers consumer the products and popularity of fashion which
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denotes the formal high-quality life.In my ,opinion
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 completely agree that communities copying each other goods for
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 of numerous designs.
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 of all, humans are highly up-to-date for many things.From birth,the child used to replay their parents move
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 for remember to forget something by mistake.
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,in teenagers when they see someone buy a car
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 and he wants it so bad that will affect their personality.So, we should give them some advice about copying that you must be hardworking for a long time to become wealthy to get whatever you want.
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, in a physical ,way the human reaction is completely clear via copying it just because they like it for the state of the art way.
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, consumer goods
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 gain popularity based on copying. In other ,words people feel the need to possess an item they must have seen with a friend or even a stranger. Manufacturers take advantage of
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 fact to boost their patronage by using celebrities as brand ambassadors, causing the masses to believe that these public figures make use of a product.
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 in turn affects sales. A recent study carried out in Lagos showed that the sales of a pair of headphones had a 70% rise in sales when the company signed an endorsement deal with a famous musician. In conclusion, it is proven that people do a lot of copying when it comes to general consumer items and clothing.
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, companies and manufacturers have taken advantage of that for a long time.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inherently social creatures
  • acceptance and validation
  • peer influence
  • fashion trends
  • consumer behavior
  • media influence
  • celebrities
  • social media platforms
  • trend adoption
  • mass production
  • fast fashion
  • accessibility
  • unique identity
  • mainstream trends
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