More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

It is true that the obesity rates in most countries are increasing dramatically,

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argue that an increase in high-fat ingredients' prices would solve the problem.

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solution due to some reasons below. The most compelling reason for

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issue is that raising the expenditure of these ingredients is,

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, not an effective method.

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of all, since the convenience and tastiness of fast food, many youngsters are addicted to it.

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means that they are not ready to curb their appetite for junk food,

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, they are ready to pay for these

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the higher cost.

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, according to a study,

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the McDonalds' outlets had adjusted their fare of

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to the upper level, the consumer rate remained the same.

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,

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are willing to afford those more expensive

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noticeable that

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fattening feed is not the only reason for

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. Other habits,

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as laziness and skipping

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, can

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lead to gaining weight. The most appealing example for

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can be, during the Covid-19 pandemic's lockdowns, families enjoyed eating and relaxing without doing exercises, which made the intake of food became harmful and resulted in fatness.

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, skipping

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due to the intensive work can lead to overeating as they will be much hungrier later. In conclusion,

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there are many practices for obesity, increase

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foods fee is not a suitable choice.

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, in order to maintain a healthy weight, should be encouraged to do physical exercises or to insert vital nutrients in their

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should be ensured to eat regularly so as to curb their appetite.