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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Society
 can`t do anything to make positive
changes
 to the
environment
 so that only
government
 and big companies can make
this
 difference. Nowadays, the controversial topic about improving the state of the
environment
 and increasing the level of people`s lives takes a relevant place throughout
society
. Many people believe that they don`t have enough power and rights to change something, that's why they tend to wait if the
government
 provides some
changes
instead
 of them.
This
 essay will discuss both views of the statement with examples from my experience,
although
 will claim that even individuals can provide relevant
impact
 on the
environment
. According to the statistics, people tend to judge the
government
 more nowadays,
however
, it appears, they are more commonly think, they don`t have enough power to improve something. I am strongly persuaded, it is because they don`t want to take responsibility for improving the surroundings. In order that
society
 has been interacting with the crucial
changes
 of the
environment
 for ages, it is clear, they won`t change anything, because of the neglected negative
impact
. If people were facing the dramatic consequences face to face, they would be more conscious about their possible
impact
.
Nevertheless
, positive
changes
 are more possible throughout
society
, because they could shrink their responsibilities and make these
changes
 more effective and visible.
However
, the
government
 should help individuals to influent the
environment
 by providing some restrictions for those, who use private vehicles,
for instance
. That may decrease the total amount of pollution,
this
 will eliminate the harmful
impact
. To take everything into consideration, I will argue that the population can do nothing to improve the
environment
,
however
 by adding certain restrictions to help
society
 to participate in these
changes
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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