Some people believe that children should listen to and obey their parents. Others believe that children should think and do things on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Childhood is considered to be the best learning phase in one's
life
.
However
, it is debated whether the kids should follow the guidelines of their
parents
or try to carve their own way.
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based examples.
Firstly
, The
children
who are able to get the proper instructions and teaching make
less
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mistakes in their
life
.
Moreover
, they tend to have
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better clarity and
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picture about their
life
.
Parents
are not only the
first
teachers but
also
the closest ones. They can direct the boys and girls with the options that they did not know in their times.
In addition
, they can safeguard these young ones from the mistakes that either they have made or seen others making
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by specifying their learning in
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fashion.
For example
, I have seen
children
getting influenced
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the
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life
and drugs while failing to see the consequences of chasing them.
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their tender age, they end up making choices based on societal pressure or for
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experience.
On the contrary
,
Parents
who are able to control and monitor their
children
have been able to safeguard them.
Consequently
, We have
also
seen that
children
given space and options in
life
, tend to become
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, better
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maker
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and more responsible
being
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beings
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.
Parents
knowledge is limited to their own experiences while
their
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are many more things to learn, At the same time, it is not necessary that
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abilities of the child
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same
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as their
parents
.
Furthermore
, schools now a day have organised their
curriculm
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curriculum
curricula
in
such
a way that kids can gain exposure to both academic and practical facets of
life
.
for
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kids can experience various ports arts, subjects and decide about their liking or where they see themselves as
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a good
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fit. In conclusion, while I firmly believe that
parents
play a vital role in child's upbringing and knows best for their
children
, its is equally important to provide teenagers with free will to shape up their interest and future.
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  • obey
  • authority
  • guidance
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • beneficial
  • harmful
  • mistakes
  • independent
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • problem-solving
  • responsibility
  • self-reliance
  • opinion
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