In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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It is undeniable that many
parents
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in modern society are wanting their
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to achieve in life. Many
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are often said
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their
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, if they try hard enough to do something, they will achieve anything. Form my point of view,
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giving
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this
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message
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is more the benefits, it can present some serious problems, described in the following paragraph. On the one hand, one of the important benefits of taking
children
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to try to do something is that it can educate them that nothing in
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world can be easily obtained without effort.
For example
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, many
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in Thai society are often teaching their
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to try to save money on their own when they want to buy toys.
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,
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message
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can motivate
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to have
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and a potential power which lead to achievement in their adult life. In theory,
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said that students who are learning on
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subjects can lead to
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in their education rather than students who are learning only fundamental subjects because they must try hard to solve the complication problems which must use many hard skills
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as analytical
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and critical thinking skill.
On the other hand
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, some people think that giving
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this
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message
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can cause negative problems,
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as. it is
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forcing
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children
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to make something that
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is too difficult for them because many
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often expecting their
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to be able to do anything after they teach.
For instance
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, many doctor families are often giving many difficult lessons to their
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to do, and they expect that their
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will try hard to solve lessons, but
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cannot do it because it is too hard for them. In that case,
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tend to
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problem
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. Another drawback, giving
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message
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to
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is that teaching
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to only winnow to lose, for
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will try hard
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get
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something, but if they cannot do it successfully, they will
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regret
and blame
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themself
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. In conclusion, telling
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to try hard to do anything to succeed offer the motivation to
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in modern society, but it
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offer
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to stress in
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life.
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, it is recommended that
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should not put
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major effort
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their
children
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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