In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

It is undeniable that many
parents
in modern society are wanting their
children
to achieve in life. Many
parents
are often said
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their
children
, if they try hard enough to do something, they will achieve anything. Form my point of view,
although
giving
children
this
message
is more the benefits, it can present some serious problems, described in the following paragraph. On the one hand, one of the important benefits of taking
children
to try to do something is that it can educate them that nothing in
this
world can be easily obtained without effort.
For example
, many
parents
in Thai society are often teaching their
children
to try to save money on their own when they want to buy toys.
Additionally
,
this
message
can motivate
children
to have
an intentions
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and a potential power which lead to achievement in their adult life. In theory,
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said that students who are learning on
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subjects can lead to
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in their education rather than students who are learning only fundamental subjects because they must try hard to solve the complication problems which must use many hard skills
such
as analytical
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and critical thinking skill.
On the other hand
, some people think that giving
children
this
message
can cause negative problems,
such
as. it is
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forcing
children
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to make something that
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is too difficult for them because many
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often expecting their
children
to be able to do anything after they teach.
For instance
, many doctor families are often giving many difficult lessons to their
children
to do, and they expect that their
children
will try hard to solve lessons, but
children
cannot do it because it is too hard for them. In that case,
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tend to
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problem
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. Another drawback, giving
this
message
to
child
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is that teaching
children
to only winnow to lose, for
children
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get
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something, but if they cannot do it successfully, they will
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regret
and blame
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. In conclusion, telling
children
to try hard to do anything to succeed offer the motivation to
children
in modern society, but it
also
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to stress in
children
life.
Therefore
, it is recommended that
parents
should not put
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major effort
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their
children
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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