Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. Do or texting do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Music
plays a role in our life irrespective of cultures,
genre
and
ages
and it can convey some emotions. According to many
people
,
music
can bring
people
together, whether they are of different
ages
or cultures. I can only partially agree with
this
statement and I will discuss it. To
beging
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begin
with,
music
is a good way of making
people
feel happy, relaxed and light, but it
not
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always necessary that everyone
enjoy
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the same
genre
of song.
Music
can be enjoyed by
people
even they are from different cultures or
ages
,
for instance
, when you are
in
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at
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a party,
such
as
wedding
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a wedding
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or birthday celebration,
certainly
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you
listen
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several types of songs and you join
to
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apply
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the
people
to dance or sing together.
On the other hand
, some
people
are headstrong and can not enjoy together if they do not like a kind of
music
.
For example
, there are
people
that only listen and like just a
specifc
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specific
genre
of
music
,
such
as rock
music
and they
are not be
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are not
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able to
listen
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tolisten
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another type of song like classical
music
or be together in a place
that is
playing several
genre
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genres
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of
music
. Another key thing to remember,
music
can divide groups of
people
with
ages
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gap, to
ilustrate
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illustrate
it, a young person usually
enjoy
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enjoys
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different
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a different
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genre
of sounds than their parents listen
.
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Therefore
,
music
does not bring all
people
together. To conclude, I agree that
music
is a good way to bring
people
together and
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create
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creat
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create
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bonds
between
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with
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each other on some occasions, but there are
people
that are not
ecletic
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eclectic
and do not appreciate other varieties of
music
, so it can even create
divide
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a divide
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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