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It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaur, dodo…) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that
humans
 should preserve the extinction of endangered creatures from environmental changes. I partly agree with
this
 view because ecological balance and educating youngsters play a vital role. On the one hand, people face a variety of challenges when preventing the extinction of pets from the natural environment.
Firstly
, the natural process has a long historical period that its an impact on animals and
humans
. It is not only one generation to limit
this
 process, but
also
 many generations to complete it,
besides
 that there are a lot of natural disasters
such
 as tsunami, hurricanes or earthquakes which can not be stopped by
humans
.
Secondly
, some beasts need to adapt to new nature to live better.
For example
, bears live in the south of the pole its need to change their colour hair and be fatter to fight again the cold weather.
Therefore
, changing nature to protect endangered animals is difficult.
On the other hand
, I strongly believe that youngsters should do other activities
besides
 formal studies. The initial reason is that it develops other skills for
students
such
 as teamwork, soft skills or making an event. Only if they learn at university will they face a lot of challenges because a teacher can not equip them enough everything about
the
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real life.(The four walls of the classroom do not fully make a professional but of experience and theories.)
For example
, medical
students
 only learn at school,
however
, they never go to the hospital/clinic to have the proper training.
Furthermore
, having a part-time job allows them to earn for themselves and simulate them
into
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 real situations. There are a lot of problems in the fact that
students
 can not learn it through theory.
As a result
,
students
 are completely confident when they leave the university. In conclusion, while people have some problems deal with the extinction of animals, I believe that protection for extinct special species can be implemented by
humans
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extinction
  • evolution
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • conservation
  • irreversible
  • ecological balance
  • species preservation
  • environmental ethics
  • sustainability
  • endangered species
  • natural selection
  • ecosystem services
  • wildlife protection
  • moral obligation
  • human intervention
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