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Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

Over the years the outbreak of new
diseases
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 have significantly increased and so has the response to it, by the medical fraternity. In order to protect the human race from these illnesses,immunisation is crucial. I believe
parents
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 should be enforced by the
law
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 to immunise their children. Analysing the reasons
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 as the absence of knowledge towards immunisation and sheer ignorance by the
parents
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 will help bolster
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 , with more and more development done by medical sciences on vaccines against new types of
diseases
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 ,not the entire current information may be available to the
parents
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. Most of the
parents
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 not only lack complete knowledge about vaccines that are recommended for children but
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 lack knowledge about their effectiveness.
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 , most of the
parents
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 don't know the fresh
diseases
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 that are incubating in growing
kids
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 and
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 they tend to miss getting them vaccinated . In
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 cases , it is imperative of the
law
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 to mandate a specific list of vaccinations that
parents
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 can refer to and
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 get the infant immunised with.
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 an intervention by the
law
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 is important.
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 , some
parents
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 are just ignorant . They, even after knowing the harmful effects of disease and about the vaccination used to prevent it ,will just avoid getting the young ones immunised over sheer confidence. They believe that these
diseases
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 only affect rural people and can't affect them .
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 , Polio was a huge problem in
India
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. Even after massive awareness campaigns and vaccinations showing positive results on
kids
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 ,
parents
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 in urban
India
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 didn't make an effort to get their
kids
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 vaccinated. It was only after the
law
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 of
India
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 made it mandatory for
kids
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 to get
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 shot, that
this
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 disease was completely eradicated in
India
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.
Therefore
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parents
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 by
law
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 should be made to immunise their
kids
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 . In the nutshell ,immunisation is critical for growing
kids
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 and should be made a mandate. In the lack of
parents
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 understanding the usefulness of
such
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 vaccines, the human race can hugely suffer.
Hence
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 , by
law
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parents
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 should be made to immunise their
kids
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.

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