Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Nowadays, we all acknowledge that environmental issues might be the most critical
issue
in our lives. Some
people
believed that the
extinction
of particular
species
of
floras
and
faunas
remains the main
problem
of
this
issue
.
On the other hand
, others argued that there would be a more critical environmental
problem
that has to be considered for these days. In
this
essay, I will elaborate on both these views and conclude with my opinion. There are various information that we got from the news, especially about the
extinction
of particular
species
of
floras
and
faunas
.
For example
, we heard that illegal logging has a tremendous effect on
this
extinction
.
In addition
, ‘Seaspiracy,’ a film produced by Netflix, gave us an obvious perspective on how our fishing method could affect the
extinction
of several
species
of
floras
and
faunas
in the ocean.
Thus
, some
people
believe that
this
extinction
would be a severe
problem
in our societies.
Nevertheless
, some
people
who have expertise in environmental subjects said that there would be a main
problem
behind these phenomena:
climate
change. Having been investing a massive amount of money, Bill
Gates
and his wife Melinda
Gates
did many research about
this
issue
. They said
climate
change could be the most severe
problem
in these days and for our future. Various impacts could be happened: dangerous heatwave, a crisis of foods, drought, and flood (simultaneously happened) in a different area, and definitely the
extinction
of particular
species
of
floras
and
faunas
.
Therefore
,
Gates
and Melinda Foundation had some serious speeches for years encouraging
people
to be aware of
this
issue
. Once wrote a book specifically about
this
topic titled ‘How to Avoid a
Climate
Disaster,’ Bill
Gates
said that there would be more extreme jeopardy if we only do a business as usual; we have to prepare for it and do some mitigation.
To conclude
, I believe that we should take some actions to avoid (or at least lessen) the terrible impacts of
climate
change. It might be initiated by the smallest social unit: a family.
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task achievement
You provided a comprehensive response to the task, discussing both views and giving your own opinion effectively. However, it would be beneficial to elaborate more on your conclusion for a stronger finish.
coherence and cohesion
While your essay is coherent and logically sequenced, there are minor transitions that can be improved, such as linking ideas more smoothly between paragraphs.
task achievement
Supporting your points with more specific examples or data could strengthen your main arguments and make the essay more compelling.
introduction and conclusion
Your introduction clearly states the problem and outlines the essay's structure effectively.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, like the Netflix film 'Seaspiracy' and Bill Gates' work, which help to illustrate your points well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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