Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays, we all acknowledge that environmental issues might be the most critical
issue
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in our lives. Some
people
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believed that the
extinction
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of particular
species
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of
floras
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and
faunas
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remains the main
problem
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of
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issue
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On the other hand
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, others argued that there would be a more critical environmental
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that has to be considered for these days. In
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essay, I will elaborate on both these views and conclude with my opinion. There are various information that we got from the news, especially about the
extinction
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of particular
species
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of
floras
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and
faunas
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.
For example
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, we heard that illegal logging has a tremendous effect on
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extinction
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.
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, ‘Seaspiracy,’ a film produced by Netflix, gave us an obvious perspective on how our fishing method could affect the
extinction
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of several
species
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of
floras
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and
faunas
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in the ocean.
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, some
people
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believe that
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extinction
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would be a severe
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in our societies.
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, some
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who have expertise in environmental subjects said that there would be a main
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behind these phenomena:
climate
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change. Having been investing a massive amount of money, Bill
Gates
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and his wife Melinda
Gates
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did many research about
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issue
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. They said
climate
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change could be the most severe
problem
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in these days and for our future. Various impacts could be happened: dangerous heatwave, a crisis of foods, drought, and flood (simultaneously happened) in a different area, and definitely the
extinction
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of particular
species
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of
floras
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and
faunas
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.
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,
Gates
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and Melinda Foundation had some serious speeches for years encouraging
people
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to be aware of
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issue
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. Once wrote a book specifically about
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topic titled ‘How to Avoid a
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Disaster,’ Bill
Gates
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said that there would be more extreme jeopardy if we only do a business as usual; we have to prepare for it and do some mitigation.
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, I believe that we should take some actions to avoid (or at least lessen) the terrible impacts of
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change. It might be initiated by the smallest social unit: a family.
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task achievement
You provided a comprehensive response to the task, discussing both views and giving your own opinion effectively. However, it would be beneficial to elaborate more on your conclusion for a stronger finish.
coherence and cohesion
While your essay is coherent and logically sequenced, there are minor transitions that can be improved, such as linking ideas more smoothly between paragraphs.
task achievement
Supporting your points with more specific examples or data could strengthen your main arguments and make the essay more compelling.
introduction and conclusion
Your introduction clearly states the problem and outlines the essay's structure effectively.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples, like the Netflix film 'Seaspiracy' and Bill Gates' work, which help to illustrate your points well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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