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modern technology is changing our world This has advantages such as bringing people together through communication it also has disadvantages such as destroying differences between cultures To what extent agree or disagree

#technology #world #people #communication #differences #cultures
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One fact to support the above statement is the way society has changed today in its method of communicating .
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, along with ,benefits there are plenty of adverse effects on our culture’s too.
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 essay will discuss both views in depth; because ,in my opinion, advancement has brought a lot of changes in our community. To commence with, the latest development in communication helps
people
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 communicate with each other from any part of the world at any time;
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, it provides many options to talk with each other.
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, video calling, email, voice-message, multimedia
messages
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 are among some of the examples we can talk of. One relevant example is my grandmother today is adept.in using a mobile phone, it was a surprise watching her send
messages
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 to her son using emails to communicate something unheard of 10 years ago.
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people
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 communicate without any trouble by removing the distance barrier and giving them the opportunities to convey important
messages
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 in a jiffy( in a moment). For these reasons alone, modern technology is a big boon today for the
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, the same technology has broken all the cultural barriers. There are reasons for it, where families used to meet each other at festivals to greet each other now they wish each other by sending
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, video-calling, zoom call, multimedia
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 are among the techniques to see or record your message and share with each other. Community prefer to use
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, it brings disadvantages to our old culture and made
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 adopt
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 new culture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionize communication
  • global relationships
  • cultural exchange
  • cultural homogenization
  • diminish traditions
  • uniform global culture
  • cultural elements
  • dilute traditions
  • dominant languages
  • marginalizing
  • communication tools
  • cultural preservation
  • intercultural connectivity
  • cultural identity
  • cultural diversity
  • positive and negative outcomes
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