In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments, Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. I To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

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Topic Vocabulary:

ageing population
benefits
disadvantages
advantages
experience
knowledge
contribution
economy
society
healthcare
youth employment
community
intergenerational support
volunteerism
mentorship
increased demand
pension costs
social welfare systems
workforce
productivity
intergenerational conflict
technological adaptability
dependency
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skill development
employment opportunities
intergenerational solidarity
communication
lifelong learning
technological literacy
age-friendly
social policies
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