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Bringing in foreign workers to fill positions that domestic workers are unwilling to do can cause problems in the local community and should, therefore, be stopped. Do what extent do you agree with this.

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Bringing in foreign
workers
 to fill
positions
 that domestic
workers
 are unwilling to do can cause problems in the local community and should,
therefore
, be stopped.
Do
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To
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 what extent do you agree with
this
. The number of foreign
workers
 is increasing day by day around the whole world, owing to the domestic society refuges some vacancies and it is causing some issues in the local community. Many
people
 are worried, because hiring migrants to
work
 , will decrease their job opportunities. I do not agree with that statement, because there are certain
positions
 that may be filled up for foreigners.
First
 of all, I think that the migrant labourer is helping countries filling up job
positions
 that the native folk do not want to do,
such
 as farm and fields vacancies. Some places are suffering from lack of
people
 to
work
 at farmhouses and they offer
this
 kind of job for foreign.
For instance
 , Australia has programs to accept
people
 from Europe, to
work
 in the camps planting fruits and vegetables
for example
 .
On the other hand
 ,
this
 increase of migrant
workers
 can cause some problems
such
 as disorderly growth of population and decreased wages, because most foreigners accept low salaries.
For example
 , in 2018-2019, Sydney was really crowded and the rates and employments decreased too much, but in 2020 and 2021, due to the pandemic, many
people
 have returned to your country and Australia is forcing an issue to find employees to fill up a lot of
positions
. To conclude , I do not agree to stop migrants to
work
 . Despite foreign
workers
 posses a threat to domestic employees, they contribute to the countries economy by filling up some skilled vacancies.
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