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The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 contemporary era, every citizen of a
country
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 must deserve a basic
education
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 in
order
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 to survive in the competitive world.
Consequently
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, there has been a growing body of opinion that
governments
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 should more invest in educating elderly
people
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 who are uneducated rather than spending too much
money
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 on the
education
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 of
youngsters
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 so as to create an unbiased society. Being a rational mind, I,
however
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, take issue with
this
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 notion, for I am of the
view
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 that
concentration
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 on young
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people’s
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education
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 helps a
nation
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 generates a strong workforce and becomes an independent
state
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. Among the ratiocination to buttress my stance, the one that deals with the significance of adolescents’
education
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 as a way of producing productive human resources.
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, if a
country
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 gives the highest
priority
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 to provide
state
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-of-the-art teaching facilities to its juveniles, after a certain period these children work to change the fate and face of their
country
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. To exemplify, 30 years ago, Malaysia decided to spend 30% of the
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country’s
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 yearly budget on the
education
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 of
youngsters
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, resulting in producing top-class
professionals
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 every year.
Thus
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 with a
view
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 to having highly qualified workforces, it is paramount to invest
money
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 in the
education
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 of young
people
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. Another critical rationale in reference to why
governments
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 ought to focus on juveniles’
education
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instead
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 of adults’
education
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 is necessarily synonymous with becoming an autocratic and self-dependent
state
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. To be more precise, when
youngsters
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 would be highly skilled and educated, a
country
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 does not have to depend on
professionals
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, migrating from other nations.
This
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 opportunity could not be enjoyed if
governments
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 had to spend funds on the
education
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 of adults because of their limited learning capacity and age. To cite an example, China has now become a completely self-reliant
country
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 only because of giving
priority
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 to the
education
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 of adolescents.
Hence
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, so as to become a developed
nation
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, young
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people’s
Use synonyms
education
Use synonyms
 is vital. In conclusion, a
Use synonyms
country’s
Use synonyms
 government should give more
concentration
Use synonyms
 on the
education
Use synonyms
 of
youngsters
Use synonyms
 in
order
Use synonyms
 to create productive citizens and become independent. In
this
Linking Words
 contemporary era, every citizen of a
country
Use synonyms
 must deserve a basic
education
Use synonyms
 in
order
Use synonyms
 to survive in the competitive world.
Consequently
Linking Words
, there has been a growing body of opinion that
governments
Use synonyms
 should more invest in educating elderly
people
Use synonyms
 who are uneducated rather than spending too much
money
Use synonyms
 on the
education
Use synonyms
 of
youngsters
Use synonyms
 so as to create an unbiased society. Being a rational mind, I,
however
Linking Words
, take issue with
this
Linking Words
 notion, for I am of the
view
Use synonyms
 that
concentration
Use synonyms
 on young
Use synonyms
people’s
Use synonyms
education
Use synonyms
 helps a
nation
Use synonyms
 generates a strong workforce and becomes an independent
state
Use synonyms
. Among the ratiocination to buttress my stance, the one that deals with the significance of adolescents’
education
Use synonyms
 as a way of producing productive human resources.
In other words
Linking Words
, if a
country
Use synonyms
 gives the highest
priority
Use synonyms
 to provide
state
Use synonyms
-of-the-art teaching facilities to its juveniles, after a certain period these children work to change the fate and face of their
country
Use synonyms
. To exemplify, 30 years ago, Malaysia decided to spend 30% of the
Use synonyms
country’s
Use synonyms
 yearly budget on the
education
Use synonyms
 of
youngsters
Use synonyms
, resulting in producing top-class
professionals
Use synonyms
 every year.
Thus
Linking Words
 with a
view
Use synonyms
 to having highly qualified workforces, it is paramount to invest
money
Use synonyms
 in the
education
Use synonyms
 of young
people
Use synonyms
. Another critical rationale in reference to why
governments
Use synonyms
 ought to focus on juveniles’
education
Use synonyms
instead
Linking Words
 of adults’
education
Use synonyms
 is necessarily synonymous with becoming an autocratic and self-dependent
state
Use synonyms
. To be more precise, when
youngsters
Use synonyms
 would be highly skilled and educated, a
country
Use synonyms
 does not have to depend on
professionals
Use synonyms
, migrating from other nations.
This
Linking Words
 opportunity could not be enjoyed if
governments
Use synonyms
 had to spend funds on the
education
Use synonyms
 of adults because of their limited learning capacity and age. To cite an example, China has now become a completely self-reliant
country
Use synonyms
 only because of giving
priority
Use synonyms
 to the
education
Use synonyms
 of adolescents.
Hence
Linking Words
, so as to become a developed
nation
Use synonyms
, young
Use synonyms
people’s
Use synonyms
education
Use synonyms
 is vital. In conclusion, a
Use synonyms
country’s
Use synonyms
 government should give more
concentration
Use synonyms
 on the
education
Use synonyms
 of
youngsters
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 in
order
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 to create productive citizens and become independent
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