The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
contemporary era, every citizen of a country
must deserve a basic education
in order
to survive in the competitive world. Consequently
, there has been a growing body of opinion that governments
should more invest in educating elderly people
who are uneducated rather than spending too much money
on the education
of youngsters
so as to create an unbiased society. Being a rational mind, I, however
, take issue with this
notion, for I am of the view
that concentration
on young people’s
education
helps a nation
generates a strong workforce and becomes an independent state
.
Among the ratiocination to buttress my stance, the one that deals with the significance of adolescents’ education
as a way of producing productive human resources. In other words
, if a country
gives the highest priority
to provide state
-of-the-art teaching facilities to its juveniles, after a certain period these children work to change the fate and face of their country
. To exemplify, 30 years ago, Malaysia decided to spend 30% of the country’s
yearly budget on the education
of youngsters
, resulting in producing top-class professionals
every year. Thus
with a view
to having highly qualified workforces, it is paramount to invest money
in the education
of young people
.
Another critical rationale in reference to why governments
ought to focus on juveniles’ education
instead
of adults’ education
is necessarily synonymous with becoming an autocratic and self-dependent state
. To be more precise, when youngsters
would be highly skilled and educated, a country
does not have to depend on professionals
, migrating from other nations. This
opportunity could not be enjoyed if governments
had to spend funds on the education
of adults because of their limited learning capacity and age. To cite an example, China has now become a completely self-reliant country
only because of giving priority
to the education
of adolescents. Hence
, so as to become a developed nation
, young people’s
education
is vital.
In conclusion, a country’s
government should give more concentration
on the education
of youngsters
in order
to create productive citizens and become independent. In this
contemporary era, every citizen of a country
must deserve a basic education
in order
to survive in the competitive world. Consequently
, there has been a growing body of opinion that governments
should more invest in educating elderly people
who are uneducated rather than spending too much money
on the education
of youngsters
so as to create an unbiased society. Being a rational mind, I, however
, take issue with this
notion, for I am of the view
that concentration
on young people’s
education
helps a nation
generates a strong workforce and becomes an independent state
.
Among the ratiocination to buttress my stance, the one that deals with the significance of adolescents’ education
as a way of producing productive human resources. In other words
, if a country
gives the highest priority
to provide state
-of-the-art teaching facilities to its juveniles, after a certain period these children work to change the fate and face of their country
. To exemplify, 30 years ago, Malaysia decided to spend 30% of the country’s
yearly budget on the education
of youngsters
, resulting in producing top-class professionals
every year. Thus
with a view
to having highly qualified workforces, it is paramount to invest money
in the education
of young people
.
Another critical rationale in reference to why governments
ought to focus on juveniles’ education
instead
of adults’ education
is necessarily synonymous with becoming an autocratic and self-dependent state
. To be more precise, when youngsters
would be highly skilled and educated, a country
does not have to depend on professionals
, migrating from other nations. This
opportunity could not be enjoyed if governments
had to spend funds on the education
of adults because of their limited learning capacity and age. To cite an example, China has now become a completely self-reliant country
only because of giving priority
to the education
of adolescents. Hence
, so as to become a developed nation
, young people’s
education
is vital.
In conclusion, a country’s
government should give more concentration
on the education
of youngsters
in order
to create productive citizens and become independentSubmitted by shawlin90 on
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