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Human activities have negative effects on plants and animal species . Some people think that it is too late to do anything about this problem . Other people believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation . Discuss both views and give your opinion .

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People have different views about whether we should take action to improve the living environment of
animals
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 and
plants
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. While some people think it is too late to change
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 situation, I believe that we can do a lot of things to effectively protect wildlife. From my point of view, humans can take many measures to promote the protection of
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 and
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.
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, through the establishment of nature reserves, we can protect forests and many endangered
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, and improve the habitat of wild
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 and gradually eliminate the risk of extinction. China's protection of giant pandas is a very successful case.
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, governments can introduce legislation to prohibit illegal felling of trees, the trade of wild
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 and wild animal products, which can greatly reduce the number of endangered wild
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 being hunted. By these measures, many species of
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 and
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 can
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 avoid the fate of extinction.
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, I can understand the arguments against the protection of
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. The main reason for
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 view is that the survival and development of human beings are more important compared with protecting wild lives. Humans need a better living environment and more natural resources, so we have to occupy more forests and the habitat of wild
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. Another possible reason for
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 opinion is that many kinds of wild
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 have become extinct, and we can no longer change
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 situation and we should focus on more important things. In conclusion,
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 human beings are facing great difficulties of raising
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 a large population, it seems to me that we should do our best to protect
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 and
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, these actions can improve the environment of humans in return and better support the development of the globe.
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