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You are doing an evening course.Write a letter to the principal of your school and explain that the course that you are taking is slightly different in the way it is delivered from what the school offered. Provide the details of the course Explain what the problem is Give some suggestions to fix the problem

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to put your attention
on
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to
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 the concern which I
am
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have been
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 having
from
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for
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last
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the last
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weeks
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few weeks
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. I have chosen the Computer system course from September 2024 to December 2025 for
evening
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the evening
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 batch. My friend recommended me to do
this
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 course because it will help me to get
IT
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an IT
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 job. He suggested
me
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apply
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your school information.
While
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 doing admission there were some things told to me which is different now. I want to ask about those questions. As
,
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 I am full-time working in
Hotel
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a Hotel
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and
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apply
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I do not have enough time
for going
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in-person
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to school. I chose online classes because
they
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it was mentioned that there is no difference in both modes. But when I started with my first lecture, my teacher mentioned that you will get more
detail oriented
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 information if you will attend offline classes. After that, I asked some students and they agreed and some
them
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of them
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 said that they
have
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 changed it from virtual to in-person. It
will
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would
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 be
great
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 help if you could tell me the all details. Because
,
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 there is no difference in
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the fee
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fee
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of
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 both modes. If
wide
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 range of information is provided in that class, I would like to change it to offline classes. It is very important for me to pass
this
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 course. Hope to hear back soon Yours sincerely, Sim

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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking the text into clearer paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea or point. This will enhance the clarity of your letter.
task achievement
Try to maintain a consistent writing style throughout the letter. Some informal phrases might be revised to match the formal tone of the letter.
task achievement
You have clearly stated the purpose of your letter and included relevant details about the course.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a polite greeting and closing, which is appropriate for formal correspondence.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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