Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent.
 Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While some believe that modernisation has made us more reliant on each other,
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, think that we are more self-reliant and free from dependency on
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as time has progressed. I believe that we have become more independent than at any time in history.
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who advocate that we have become more dependent on each other in
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modern era often present the idea that our necessity has increased and we need to interact with far more
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in a way requires us to rely on
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for our needs.
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, office executives mostly rely on laundry services, restaurants, housemaids, cleaning services and so on to have their necessary works done. In the past,
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used to do most of these tasks on their own.
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, the prices of education, house, daily commodities etc. are skyrocketing day by day and we need to rely on our parents to have those needs fulfilled until we get a job. When we will become earning members, our parents and children will rely on us. Due to
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’s busy schedules and high ambitions, they need to socialise and get to know
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from different walks of life and
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creates a wider circle in which
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’s interaction and reliance on each other increase.
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, I would agree with the
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who opine that modernization has made us free and less reliant on
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. In most countries, young children are trying to support their education and living costs. After a certain age, they prefer to stay own their own house. The number of nuclear and single-parent families proves that
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are less reliant on
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. We are free to pick the school, travel to other countries and make our choices for most of the major events in our life including picking our life partners. The progress of technology has made us more self-reliant and we love to take advantage of modern tools and devices to make things of our own.
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, many
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these days pick an online lesson than getting admitted to a training institute. Many of us even have the freedom to work from home and
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is a paradigm shift in the way we earn our living.
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, the gender equality and women empowerment movements have greatly made women free from
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reliance and self-dependent and
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has all been possible only recently. In conclusion, though some
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think that the modern era is the time when we are more reliant on each other, I personally believe that we are more free and self-reliant
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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