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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both and give your opinion.

Some
scientists
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 claim
humans
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 should try to
contact
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 with extraterrestrial civilizations that could potentially exist somewhere in the universe.
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, some are
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 and advise against
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 attempts. In
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 both views will be explored. One of the main reasons why making
contact
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 with extraterrestrials is important is technology. Many
scientists
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 believe if they find highly intelligent aliens, they will be able to use their technology and learn more about unknown fields of science.
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,
humans
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 are not capable of travelling to other planets.
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, making
contact
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 with extraterrestrial creatures with the speculation that they are more advanced than
humans
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, looks convenient since
humans
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 could use their knowledge to overcome these limitations. Limited resources on the Earth are another reason. Over centuries, many of the Earth’s valuable resources have been consumed. Finding other civilizations could help
humans
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 to without the need of exploring the universe start a trade with extraterrestrials, similar to what is on the Earth between different countries, and import what it needs easily.
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, a group of
scientists
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 suggest making
contact
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 with intelligent extraterrestrial creatures could be harmful. One of their main concerns is war. They believe there is no guarantee that intelligent civilizations will not invade the Earth and enslave
humans
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.
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, without considering
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 concern, a
contact
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 could be very devastating. Another reason is health. Some experts believe there might be many organisms in
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 that could be dangerous for
humans
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. When it comes to living beings like aliens, the risk of transmission to
humans
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 increases.
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, the human race may be exposed to irreparable biological damage. In conclusion, a group of
scientists
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 believe
humans
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 should try to find extraterrestrial creatures and make
contact
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 with them,
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 others are against
this
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 idea and find it dangerous.
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 it is risky to
contact
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 with aliens
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 war and diseases, it could benefit
humans
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due to
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 learning about new technologies and finding resources necessary for mankind’s existence.

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Your essay presents a balanced view and discusses both sides of the argument, which is essential for task achievement.
improvement
Consider enhancing the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs to improve coherence. Sometimes transitions can be improved for better readability.
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Try to provide clearer and more specific examples to bolster your arguments. More concrete examples could enhance clarity and support your points more persuasively.
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The essay successfully presents both sides of the argument, showing a good understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extraterrestrial
  • investigate
  • interstellar
  • speculate
  • communication
  • primitive
  • potential
  • collaboration
  • unlock
  • unprecedented
  • advancement
  • caution
  • consequences
  • hostile
  • unknowingly
  • civilization
  • disrupt
  • evolution
  • preserve
  • ponder
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