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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

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Moving away from rural areas towards urban zones is becoming increasingly normal in many countries. A huge number of
people
 are choosing big metropolises to live in in order to improve their life´s quality.
This
 essay will explain why
people
 are moving to these places and how can be affected the
city
´s public services.
To begin
 with, most rural
people
 choose to move away because they seek a better life standard that cannot be achieved where they live. The main cause is that in urban zones, the amount of hospitals or health-care attention centres is much more than in the countryside.
Also
, the quality is better because of the fact that it is easier to get medical supplies.
For example
, normally if someone has an accident in a
city
, an ambulance would need around 15 to 20 minutes in order to arrive at the place while in rural areas the delay can be up to more than one hour.
Hence
, the probability of getting faster health care is higher in the cities than in the rural areas. Something
that is
 important to consider is that an overcrowded
city
 can create serious problems for the residents as a consequence that some of their public services may collapse . All cities are prepared to hold a certain amount of
people
, when those numbers are surpassed delays in the transportation system or in the medical centres start appearing.
For instance
, the subway system from the
city
 where I live
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 can transport 150 persons between stations every 10 minutes. When I started using it two years ago, I used to get in the
first
 car that arrived,
however
 nowadays it´s normal that I have to wait
some time
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 until I´m able to get in. In conclusion,
people
 always try to seek a better quality of life, as a
,
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result
people
 are choosing to live in a
city
instead
 of the countryside.
This
 is something that should be controlled ,
otherwise
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 some places can start having problems in their public system.
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