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Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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It is true that longer working
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 contribute to higher economic growth.
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, I think that excessive working
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 will do great harm to employees and society, there are other efficient ways to boost the economy
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 as the application of technology and improvement of management. Prolonged working is not always associated with economic benefits. Extensive research studies have demonstrated that extended
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 spent on jobs are closely related to
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 stress and hurt the quality of life. When people suffer from stress, their concentration decreases rapidly and
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 slows down their productivity. Because of
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, some European countries
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 as Sweden and Finland value
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-life balance. Even though the workers of these countries
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 the fewest
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 per day among all nations around the world, they have a higher gross domestic product. The family time and social life people enjoy after
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 provide them with sufficient time to and recreate and
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 they experience less
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 strain. There are other important methods to improve economic output.
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, companies can introduce new technology to improve working efficiency and reduce
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 intensity,
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 as mechanical robots. Applying high-tech machines can not only reduce the cost of hiring manual workers but
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 largely increase the number of products that the companies can produce. It gives rise to a growth in the overall productivity.
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, we can improve collaboration efficiency by improving management, thereby increasing overall productivity. In conclusion, I believe that it is vital to keep
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work-life
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 balance, and with the deployment of technology and new management methods, we can assure both higher economic return and fewer working
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic success
  • working hours
  • productivity
  • sustainable development
  • work-life balance
  • labor laws
  • efficiency
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • burnout
  • occupational health
  • technological innovation
  • industrialized nations
  • emerging economies
  • workforce
  • competitiveness
  • workplace culture
  • employee turnover
  • quality of life
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