Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think that changes have been very positive, while others believe they have been negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.

Lifestyle
means the way of living
life
. Each and every person adapts to
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style of living
life
.
Lifestyle
does
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on various factors
such
as education, society, friends and upbringing. The standard of living does play an important role in the success of every person. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate
the
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pros and cons of
changes
in the current
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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of
human
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the human
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being
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as
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comparison
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to the past.
First
of all, I would like to illustrates the positive points of
changes
in our current living standards.
Pepole
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People
are more educated in
this
decade of
life
than our ancestors. In
21st
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century, most
of
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the
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people
has
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high living styles. They are more aware
about
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their health and fitness which leads to
less
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mortality rates.
Secondly
, The Generation gap plays an
integeral
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integral
part
among
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the
changes
of
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our lifestyles.
Furthermore
, Our
yongesters
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youngsters
are fond of
techology
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technology
. Technology makes things
more fast
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and
convient
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convenient
. New
equipments
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does
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provide more resources and more wealth with less expense.
However
,
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are
also
some negative impacts of changing our
lifestyle
. Humans would
prefers
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prefer
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to eat more from outside
restrurants
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restaurants
rather than my home. More fast food leads
more
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diseases
such
as obesity, hypertension and diabetes which leads to
high
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number of
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sickness
rate
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rates
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.
In addition
to that, Our young population leads to drug abuse due to peer pressure which leads to more
sucide
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suicide
and
morbity
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morbidity
rates.
Moreover
, More use of
machinary
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machinery
also
leads to less physical work and
umemployment
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unemployment
. In
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context, I firmly believe that
Lifestyle
change is
necessory
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necessary
but it
shoiuld
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should
be limited. We need to be up to date with
developing
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world but we should only focus on
benefical
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beneficial
changes
in
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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