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Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think that changes have been very positive, while others believe they have been negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.

#lifestyles #people #changes #points
Lifestyle
 means the way of living
life
. Each and every person adapts to
different
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 style of living
life
.
Lifestyle
 does
depends
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 on various factors
such
 as education, society, friends and upbringing. The standard of living does play an important role in the success of every person. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate
the
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 pros and cons of
changes
 in the current
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 of
human
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the human
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being
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as
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comparison
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 to the past.
First
 of all, I would like to illustrates the positive points of
changes
 in our current living standards.
Pepole
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People
 are more educated in
this
 decade of
life
 than our ancestors. In
21st
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 century, most
of
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the
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people
has
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 high living styles. They are more aware
about
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of
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 their health and fitness which leads to
less
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 mortality rates.
Secondly
, The Generation gap plays an
integeral
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integral
 part
among
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 the
changes
of
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 our lifestyles.
Furthermore
, Our
yongesters
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youngsters
 are fond of
techology
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technology
. Technology makes things
more fast
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 and
convient
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convenient
. New
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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does
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 provide more resources and more wealth with less expense.
However
,
There
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there
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 are
also
 some negative impacts of changing our
lifestyle
. Humans would
prefers
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 to eat more from outside
restrurants
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restaurants
 rather than my home. More fast food leads
more
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to more
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 diseases
such
 as obesity, hypertension and diabetes which leads to
high
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a high
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number of
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sickness
rate
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rates
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.
In addition
 to that, Our young population leads to drug abuse due to peer pressure which leads to more
sucide
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suicide
 and
morbity
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morbidity
 rates.
Moreover
, More use of
machinary
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machinery
also
 leads to less physical work and
umemployment
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unemployment
. In
the
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 context, I firmly believe that
Lifestyle
 change is
necessory
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necessary
 but it
shoiuld
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should
 be limited. We need to be up to date with
developing
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 world but we should only focus on
benefical
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beneficial
changes
 in
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Technological advancements
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Nuclear family
  • Extended family
  • Life expectancy
  • Healthcare improvements
  • mental health
  • Environmental degradation
  • Traditional family structures
  • Industrialization
  • Urbanization
  • Consumption patterns
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