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parents should spend more time with their children by helping them doing their assignment. agree or disagree?

#parents #time #children #assignment
As far as I am concerned , fathers shouldn'
t
 spend too much time helping their
toddler
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toddlers
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 to do their assignments.
First
 of all , assignments are used to improve toddler's abilities and knowledge.
For instance
,course homework can help
juvenile
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 remember the knowledge which their teachers taught them in the classroom. Group activities can even cause your toddler to have more characters which include ambition, responsibility and figure out problems by themselves.
Otherwise
, if father helps them to finish their assignment. I think it can cause a bad influence on them. When these kids faced some trouble which they can'
t
 handle easily. They may
be ask
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 parents to help them
firstly
 rather than to think out a good way to handle it. By the way,
children
 need to develop independence when they are young. As well known, each famous person always can figure out problems by themselves when they are at a young age. Parents can'
t
 accompany their
children
 forever, they often pass away earlier than their kids. I heard a terrible true story a long time ago. A fabulous mother loved her young kid so that she took care of her kid very well until she died. She gave her child all the best things that she could provide.
However
 , after
this
 awesome mother died a while , her "lucky" child was
also
 dead. The fact is
this
 boy even can'
t
 eat food by himself. All of us want to ask for help when we are in trouble, especially
children
.
Then
 , their parents will think their
children
 are too young to deal with these problems.The most important character for a child is
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independency
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.
Therefore
 , I call for every parent to let their
children
 finish assignments by themselves.You will be proud of your
children
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental involvement
  • academic achievement
  • cognitive development
  • emotional bonding
  • supportive learning environment
  • skill enhancement
  • time management
  • holistic development
  • constructive feedback
  • behavioral patterns
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