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Should museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public, or should a charge, even a voluntary charge, be levied for admittance? Discuss this issue, and give your opinion.

#museums #art #galleries #charge #admittance
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One very complex issue in today’s society is the funding of
museums
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 and art
galleries
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. Some say that they should be free of
charge
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 to the general public and funded by governments while others think they should
charge
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 an entrance fee like other attractions. Advocates of the
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 idea may argue that art-related institutions are public service institutions, which have been built with the money paid by taxpayers,
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 some believe that they should be free of
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 to pay back the society.
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, with no entrance expense, more citizens can be encouraged to learn about art and history.
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 means that arts are more available for the public, it is no longer something to be enjoyed by a privileged few.
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, others may believe
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,
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 and
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 indeed need funds to maintain management and update exhibitions. The support should come from visitors rather than governments since they do not have sufficient funds to subsidise all
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 institutions and there are other priorities for public money.
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,
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 and
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 need to
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 a certain amount of fees to control the flow of visitors so that the risks of damaging the exhibitions will be reduced. In conclusion, a possible compromise would be for the
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 and
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 to
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 a reasonable amount of fee during peak seasons in order to maintain regular management and for safety concerns.
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, when it comes to off-season, they should be opened free of
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 to the public so that more visitors can access art.
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