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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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The recent progress in agricultural technology has allowed a considerable number of
people
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 to gain access to
food
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.
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, there is still a
population
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 that has suffered from destitution.
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 essay addresses the reasons for
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 phenomenon and solutions for dealing with
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 problem. The primary reason why plenty of
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 continuously faces poverty is that the world's overall
population
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 has increasingly grown. With the economic growth in developing countries, their populations have surged to gain labour workers, resulting in a serious shortage of
food
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.
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, Indonesia's
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 has drastically increased;
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, domestic agricultural businesses are no longer able to catch up to the public's consumption.
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, the devastation of infrastructure prevents the establishment of a successful supply chain. Some places
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 as conflict zones lack fundamental facilities, which make
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 producers harder to deliver their
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 to customers. There are two possible solutions.
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 of all, the government can conduct restrictions on overpopulation. To reduce the poverty rate caused by the growing
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, the government can enforce legislation to control the
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.
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 is well exemplified by China. China set the regulation that families can give birth to only one child, which served reduction of
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, NGOs and international volunteer bodies can bring
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 to isolated areas. For suffering
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 who do not have an access to
food
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, NGOs and volunteer workers can provide provisions. In conclusion, I believe the
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 scarcity has occurred due to the growing
population
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 and the lack of accessibility to
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. To tackle
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 problem, the government can take action for regulating the
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, and NGOs and volunteers can assist
people
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 who are in remote areas by delivering
food
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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