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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some individuals assume that there is nothing in
history
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 that can benefit the human's life as the modern society differs significantly in comparison with past ones;
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, others believe that the past comprises valuable information to explore human's life as every new generation tends to repeat
mistakes
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 of previous ones. Both points of view will be discussed in
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 essay;
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, I will give my opinion. On the one hand, every new generation of
people
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 brings something new which usually can be rejected by the older generation: starting with the style of clothes and finishing with the response in the particular occasion. Even the Russian writer Turgenev chose
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 problem as the base for his novel 'Fathers and Sons'.
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, there is nothing that can be learned from the past by today's
people
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.
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,
people
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 are not robots,
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 they tend to do
mistakes
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 even though their lives can be absolutely various. Most of the time these errors may occur in repetitive patterns;
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, some
mistakes
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 can be permanent for the societies regardless of age.
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, the world war occurred twice in human
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, as it seems that governments of some countries ignored
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 of the past;
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, they repeated them again.
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, it is necessary for citizens around the world to use
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 as a source of information to understand better human life. In the light of the thoughts elaborated upon, I would like to conclude that
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 modern society faces lots of innovations which do not have anything in common with the past, there are still some occasions where generations of
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 have been doing
mistakes
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 since the beginning of human
history
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.
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