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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

#government #money #life #planets #people
Universe
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 is always
a
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very mysterious thing to
human
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humans
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.
Although
,
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 science and technology have rapidly developed, scientists want to discover other planets and demonstrate that have
life
. Today, some
people
 want the government to recognize about
wasting
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waste
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 budgets in space
project
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projects
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 and
need
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the need
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 to increase in
problem
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the problem
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 of public.
This
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 essay, I will discuss my point of view that why spending for the
people
 living in
this
 world is more important. In the
first
 place, the astronomers have
educated
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 about
possibility
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the possibility
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 of
life
in
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on
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 other planets since in the past.
However
, all
projects
 use a lot of expenditure from the government to operate diverse thesis, create spaceships, and so on.
Hence
, spending billions of dollars on space
projects
 is not sensible because the result of
such
projects
 conveys slight achievements,
for instance
, discovering water on Mars and Moon. Some
people
 think that cosmos programs should reduce money for expending more
in
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on
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the
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public issues.
For example
, global warming situation, air pollution, inadequate transportation, and etc.
Consequently
, all of
problems
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the problems
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 illustrate the national administration should improve
the
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people
life
.
Likewise
, some
people
 who live in some countries
have
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 underestimate
quality
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the quality
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 of
life
, deficient basic
factor
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factors
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, and
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lack
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luck
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lack
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 of education for children. It is
government’s
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the government’s
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 responsibility to work and spend on the welfare of the general public,
for example
, more funds can be allocated to building welfare schools and hospitals. To conclude, advancing in technology and spending on research in space is still
essential
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an essential
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 thing but budget allocation should contribute in suitable quantity in order to no effect with other necessary
projects
.
Therefore
, should use the funds to progress the overall
life
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living
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 standard of its
people
.
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