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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

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Universe
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The universe
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 is always
a
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very mysterious thing to
human
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 science and technology have rapidly developed, scientists want to discover other planets and demonstrate that have
life
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. Today, some
people
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 want the government to recognize about
wasting
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 budgets in space
project
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projects
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 and
need
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the need
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 to increase in
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the problem
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 of public.
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 essay, I will discuss my point of view that why spending for the
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 living in
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 world is more important. In the
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 place, the astronomers have
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 about
possibility
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the possibility
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 of
life
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on
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 other planets since in the past.
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projects
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 use a lot of expenditure from the government to operate diverse thesis, create spaceships, and so on.
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, spending billions of dollars on space
projects
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 is not sensible because the result of
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projects
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 conveys slight achievements,
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, discovering water on Mars and Moon. Some
people
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 think that cosmos programs should reduce money for expending more
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on
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the
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public issues.
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, global warming situation, air pollution, inadequate transportation, and etc.
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, all of
problems
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the problems
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 illustrate the national administration should improve
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people
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life
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, some
people
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 who live in some countries
have
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 underestimate
quality
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the quality
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 of
life
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, deficient basic
factor
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factors
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, and
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lack
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luck
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lack
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 of education for children. It is
government’s
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the government’s
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 responsibility to work and spend on the welfare of the general public,
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, more funds can be allocated to building welfare schools and hospitals. To conclude, advancing in technology and spending on research in space is still
essential
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an essential
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 thing but budget allocation should contribute in suitable quantity in order to no effect with other necessary
projects
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, should use the funds to progress the overall
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life
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living
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 standard of its
people
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