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In the
last
 few years,
parents
 thinking about providing their
pupils
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pupil's
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 good education in the
schools
 has been affected really adversely. That’s why they started educating them in their homes rather than sending them to literacy centres.
This
 essay will outline what has insisted the
parents
to
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provide homeschooling
instead
 of making their child
to
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learn in
schools
 and explain the advantages of studying at home. Clearly, there are many pros of doing learning at home but do not have to pay big fees bills and keeping safe their child from drugs are major ones. Nowadays, in the educational institute drugs have become a common problem
ofinstead
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instead
of instead
 learning education they discuss how they can use
a
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drugs with friends.
Furthermore
, these institutes raise the fee after every year, but the
parents
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parent's
parents'
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 earnings do not get any augment in their pay. These things repel the
parents
 from sending their
children
 to
schools
. Its crystal clear that homeschooling can not give the exposure which is indeed needed. The child will not learn to interact with the other
children
 as it's not normal to have so many different people at home daily.
In addition
, caretakers can not give them the same education as the
schools
 can ,and
children
 will be left behind in the competent world. To conclude, both learnings from guardians and teachers have their own benefits.
However
, learning is made to get from
schools
 and
parents
 need to make their
children
 aware of the difference between the good and bad.
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