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Some people say that the main environmental problem is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Some
people
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 feel that the main reason for the environmental issue is the
loss
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 of particular
species
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 of plants and
animals
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. Moving on, the
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 group says that there are more important environmental difficulties. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both sides of view and express my own opinion on the matters.
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, I will explore why some
people
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 say the environmental issue of our the
loss
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 of particular
species
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 of plants and
animals
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.
Secondly
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, I will discuss why other
people
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 disagree with it.
Body paragraph 1
In the beginning, some
people
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 believe that the
first
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 and important environmental problem is the
loss
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 of planets and
animals
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. They think if humans can be more environmentally friendly can cause the growing of the planet and
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 lac of pollution and contamination.
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, when we are going to nature we have to be more careful about trees and
animals
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, and
also
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 if we can underspending the fossil fuel, which is one of the important things cause of air pollution;
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, we will have clean earth and planet can be grown,
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 if folk does not do a hunt
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species
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 of
animals
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 doesn't die.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, some persons think we have more important environmental difficulties than the
loss
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 of particular
species
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 of plants and
animals
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, which is I can't entirely agree with it. All-time if we want to start doing the good things, we should start with small things.
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, if all the
people
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 worldwide live more environmentally friendly,
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 as using solar energy for power, riding a bike, recycling the garbage, and using plastic, it can help our mother earth.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I believe that all the folk around the earth and the government of all countries should care about the environment and environmental problems.
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, we can give a hand by hand and improve over solar systems.

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