Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is a
wonderfull
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wonderful
saying that says, 'all good things are meant to be shared with
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. I
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truly
believe in
this
philosophy that we should always share things, knowledge or information to help other people.
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view is contradicted by two types of human beings in our society. In
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we will talk about these humans as well as
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outweigh
one opinion over the other.
Firstly
, I would like to mention that my parents taught me from a very young age that I should always share everything with others. Nothing in
this
world
is ours permanently.
Inspite
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of trying to achieve personal gains for some research or a business trick or academics, we should always try to help other people who are interested in improving
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. My point to prove here is, as we are gods most unique and gifted creation, we should never forget
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out
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roots and try to leave
this
place a little better after us.
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,
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talk about Sir Issac Newton. If he had never thought about gravity or discussed it and openly shared his research on gravity with the
world
, I am sure we would be living
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a different age altogether.
Secondly
, there are many people who believe that if they kept an important thing
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a secret, it will help them attain their own selfish benefits to
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one step
ahed
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ahead
of their
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.
However
, they don't realise the most important thing in life that if they start sharing the valuable things with others, the
world
would be a better place to live and the amount of satisfaction that he/she will receive will
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definitely
outscore any other happiness in the
world
.
For instance
, I had a friend who would always score better in exams but whenever I asked him any doubt, he would act like he does not know the solution. Later, one day he asked me to teach him how to dance and
this
time I made up an excuse and left. In conclusion, it is always better to share knowledge with others, as
this
world
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place if we stick together as humankind and try to avoid our personal gains for the larger good in life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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