"Finding it hard to remember important facts and figures? Improve your memory in 10 weeks with our Memory Course. Places are limited and the course is available for only a short time." You see the above advertisement for a course designed to help improve your memory. Write a letter to organisers of the course. In the letter: - Give some background information about yourself - Explain your own problems and why you would like to do the course. - enquire about the methods used on the course - enquire about course fees and dates.
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Dear Sir or Madam,
I have read the advertisement for your Memory Course and I am very concerned about your curriculum. I am a full-time mom with one toddler at the moment. Before I used to work as a teacher. After my pregnancy, I left my job and invested my time in my family. Now my baby is turning 2 years old and I am going to send him to kindergarten so that I can be back to work.
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I am going to start my new job in the next 3 months so I want to make sure to finish the course before I am ready to work.
I’m looking forward to hearing from you.
Sincerely,
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Coherence & Cohesion
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