Some people say that children no longer need to go to school since everything can be learned online. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the era of
technology
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is developing rapidly. Everything can be applied to
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as work, research, seminars, and especially learning.
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, some people say that children no longer need to go to
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since everything can be learned online. It's obvious that
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has profits and drawbacks. For the
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one, I'll talk about distance learning. It means people just stay at home and learn by electronic devices: computers, smartphones, or tablets. I cannot deny that it's more convenient for many
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. Particular is the student who is far away. They do not need to pay for moving expenses, travel to
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, and waste
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for that.
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that,
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promotes their self-study and have more
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to access
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or the internet.
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, I suppose schoolers
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have to deal with the disadvantages side of online learning. Most of them must be in contact directly with devices for at least 1 hour, too much screen
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can affect their vision. Some would not have a healthy lifestyle. The teacher cannot control the works or the integrity of
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so that would affect their knowledge.
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, they would not be able to broaden horizons or a good relationship between teachers with
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or each other,
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these pupils may tend to be shy in social interaction. The
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one, children need to go to
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. Myself, I am a student who has attended classes for over 9 years. From my point of view, study at
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certainly has a lot of advantages. The amount of knowledge that learners get from studying in
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and learning online is the same. But learning at
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can make interactions between teachers and
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or each other. Inquire from peers is a good way to improve self-study.
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, scholars who attend
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may be an inconvenience in commuting. They have to pay a certain amount of money and waste
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on it. Having less access to
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devices is
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a big disadvantage for pupils. To summarize, we should balance both. Personally, I believe children can study at
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with the help of
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.
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may help develop the good points and limit the bad points of both.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized education
  • flexible learning pace
  • peer pressure
  • social development
  • diverse range of ideas
  • comprehensive education
  • specialized educators
  • extracurricular activities
  • traditional schools
  • structured environment
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