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It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. Dinosaur, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

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Wildlife
 namely dinosaurs, dodos, etc. are more and more mass extinction, and it is called a natural process.
Besides
, some
people
 think that there is no reason why
people
 should protect any
animals
, and I completely disagree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, animal
species
 bring a healthy eco-system for the environment and
people
. It is clear to see that reducing of
animals
 that eat meat and increasing in the amounts of
animals
 that eat only plant could lose balance in eco-system.
For example
, herbivores rose significantly, and they would consume a large number of plants;
therefore
, it affects agriculture.
Secondly
,
wildlife
 plays a vital role in improving the economy of nations. Thanks to protecting
animals
 that countries could earn a lot of benefits from money.
For instance
, Singapore is one of the great examples where authorities have taken steps of creating habitat and maintaining the
wildlife
 just to promote tourism in their country.
Finally
, if
people
 prevented animal
species
 from extinct, they would contribute a lot of benefits to medicinal values. Obviously,
people
 could extract a lot of nutrients from animal
species
. Illustration, codfish contains a huge rich amount in omega3 and omega6 antioxidant that helps fight to age. In conclusion, some
people
 believe that there is no reason why
people
 need to perform activities to protect animal
species
 from extinction because it is a natural process.
Nevertheless
, in fact,
people
 have many reasons to prevent
wildlife
 from extinction namely improving a healthy eco-system, developing the economy, and bringing advantage about medicinal values.
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