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People were happier in previous generations compared to now. To what extent do you agree?

Some people claim that our parents and grandparents lived calmer and happier lives than we are. Personally, I strongly disagree with
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 idea because I think that the previous
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 had a lot of things to worry about. In
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the lives
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 of both generations and provide my perspectives.
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 with, the modern
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 has all
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 items. The majority of them are well provided for in terms of nutrition, healthcare, education, and living conditions. All these factors increase the quality of life and in turn the level of happiness. An average person lives much longer and earns several times more than their parents did.
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, it is undeniable that nowadays people experience a lot of stress
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 frantic pace of life.
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, one should not forget that our ancestors
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 their own problems as well. Looking back at the previous
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, it’s clear that people had fewer forms of entertainment and fewer personal needs. In some regions, individuals were starving and were willing to do anything just to find a slice of bread.
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, poor medicine, lack of education and a tough political situation in the entire world just exacerbated the real state of affairs.
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, the vast majority of the population was involved in the forever wars which brought just distress and distractions.
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, from my perspective, it was quite hard to enjoy life in these conditions. Summing up, I tend to believe that the previous
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 definitely was not happier than the new one. I think that each
generation
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 has their own issues and pleasures.

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task achievement
Make sure each point is fully explained and supported with examples or details.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas better using linking words like 'however', 'moreover', and 'on the other hand'.
positive
The introduction clearly states your opinion, which is a good start.
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You provided examples from both generations, showing different perspectives on happiness.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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