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_The provided line graph gives information about
Internet
 surfers in three different countries namely:
Canada
,
USA
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 and
Mexico
 measured by
percentage
,over a ten-year period from 1999 to 2009. Overall,it can be clearly seen from the graph that
Canada
 had the highest
percentage
 of
Internet
 users while
Mexico
 had the lowest proportion of consumers by the end of the given period. The
USA
 started out with the highest
percentage
 of
internet
 users in 1999 that was ,approximately
at
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20
percent
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. Whereas,
Canada
 and
Mexico
 just had about 10% and 5% respectively. after five years, in 2005 there was a noticeable increase in the proportion of
Internet
 users.In
Canada
 showed an upward trend to 70% .with regard to
USA
 and
Mexico
 the
percentage
 increased gradually around 53
percent
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 and 20
percent
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 respectively.
lastly
,four years later, in 2009,
Canada
 had a very large majority of its people using the
Internet
 exceeding
USA
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the USA
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 that had about 90% of
Internet
 surfers over the same period.
on the contrary
, increasing over the whole time.
Mexico
 had the lowest proportion of people consuming the
Internet
 just under a half
percent
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 in 2009._
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