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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, social networking
sites
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 play an important role in everyday
life
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. While
people
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 think the negative effects of these
sites
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 are more significant, I disagree with
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 argument and I think those
sites
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 have a more positive influence on
people
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 and
society
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.  As to
individuals
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, social networking platforms can have a positive impact on their daily
life
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.
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 of all, it helps
people
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 to extend their networks.
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, it is possible for
people
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 to know others from another country by using social networking
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.
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,
individuals
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 can have opportunities to share their own experiences and stories, which is a good way to inspire other
people
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.
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,
people
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 who are using social networking
sites
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 tend to be more informative. They can keep up to date with what is happening. These platforms are good places for
individuals
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 to obtain information from all over the world.  These
sites
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also
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 can affect the whole
society
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 positively. Because
people
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 can easily reach out to other
people
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, they are less likely to be isolated from
society
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, which means
people
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 can have a sense of belonging.
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,
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society
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 will be more stable and potentially there will be fewer crimes.
Moreover
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, those social networking
sites
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 can help
people
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 lead a better
life
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.
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,
people
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 can be affected by the influencers with positive
life
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 attitudes, and follow the lifestyle of these influencers. 
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, these
sites
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 are of importance in encouraging
people
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 to live a better
life
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. In conclusion, I disagree that
individuals
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 and
society
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 are largely negatively affected by social networking
sites
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, and these
sites
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 have more positive effects on all of us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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