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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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In conclusion, I would like to mention that keeping animals in zoos is not humane since they suffer a lack of freedom and settle for poor facilities. At the same time, we could apply some new technologies and approaches which could play a role as alternatives and meet the needs of animal lovers. It is considered by some that the
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 market should suggest to consumers of a particular country a range of only
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 produced
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 with no option of foreign products. To my mind,
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 an approach in selling deprives the local population of an opportunity to get to know other cuisines and cultures.
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, consuming imported
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 sometimes can lead to problems with the stomach because of its low quality.
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 of all, since national dishes of each country are considered as an essential part of a nation, we should understand that restricting supermarkets to trade overseas
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 somehow limits people's outlook. It occurs because not everyone is in the state to go abroad and try new cuisines there.
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 why having access to imported products allows people to get in touch with a variety of cultures without even leaving their home city.
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, here,in Moscow, I frequently purchase Korean and Chines dinners.
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, I am aware of an opposite opinion that suggests that the import of provision should be cancelled due to the possibility of its spooling.But yet, I lean toward the opinion that spoiled products are not a threat if consumers precisely check the date of production and choose proofed stores for making purchases. In conclusion, I would like to say that supermarkets which suggest an option of foreign
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 are a great chance for people to get an image about other countries' traditional dishes. And
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, when it comes to choosing the concrete product each customer should be responsible for his or her own choice to avoid situations
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