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People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. what are the causes of this problem? How lo overcome il?

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Nowadays achieving a
balance
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 between
work
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 and
life
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 has become very difficult.
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 few people manage to achieve
work
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life
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balance
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 while few people lack
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 ability.
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 essay discusses various causes for
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 problem and how to overcome it.
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, the main reason behind the lack of
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life
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balance
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 is extended working hours.
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, there is a deadline for a particular project and the employee fails to reach the deadline
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 he is automatically forced to
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overtimetime
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overtime time
 which ends up with very less personal
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. In
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cases
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 we need to essentially take a small break for one or two days after finishing up the deadline so that we feel refreshed and get to spend some
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 with our dear ones. Taking a small break
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 makes us realise that
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 is not everything and we have a personal
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 too.
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, we tend to ignore our social
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 by engaging ourselves in
work
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.
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, there is a function in our close relative's house,
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 we need to take some
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 out of our busy lives to attend the function so that we can maintain a social
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. We are always allowed to take some
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 out of our working hours and have some
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 for our personal needs.
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, we need to do some physical exercise like yoga or go for a walk in the morning hours,
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 makes our day even more energetic. So we should always take
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 and spend away from
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. In conclusion, even though how difficult our
work
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 is and how dedicated we need to be at our workplace, it is always recommended to have a
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lifelife
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life life
life-life
balance
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 to ensure we are not becoming like robots and not have a personal
life
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: The equilibrium between personal life and career work.
  • Burnout: Physical or mental collapse caused by overwork or stress.
  • Time management: The process of organizing and planning how to divide your time between different activities.
  • Financial pressures: Economic demands that might force someone to prioritize work over personal life.
  • Overcommitting: Taking on more responsibilities than one can handle.
  • Technological advancements: Innovations in technology that make it easier to stay connected to work outside of office hours.
  • Societal expectations: Cultural norms and beliefs that influence people's behavior and decisions.
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