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Many students today graduate high school and want to continue their studies overseas. Give the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

Society today is drastically different from the past, especially
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.Nowadays, many international
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 are looking forward to completing their education in another country.
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, they are unaware of the benefits and issues of
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 decision.
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 essay will give the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad. On the one hand, there are multiple advantages to studying abroad.
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 who studied abroad have increased career chances.
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 might be attending world-class universities, which do not exist in their home country.
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 who complete their education abroad benefit by learning a new language. Learning multiple languages can only improve a student's employability.
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, being away from home only enhances personal growth.
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 must learn to function on their own.
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 includes educational responsibilities
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 living requirements.
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, there are numerous problems that
students
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 may experience when studying abroad. One of the common problems is language difficulties. Many international
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 have an issue with the foreign language.
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, they may have trouble understanding the slang. The second serious issue is financial struggles.
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, many
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 have not worked.
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 is because most
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 are under the age of twenty-one and have financial dependence on their parents. As well, tuition and educational expenses are astronomical.
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, being far away from home can be a serious problem. As well,
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 may result in being homesick or depressed. In conclusion, it is very clear to see that there are numerous advantages to studying in another country.
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, there are some serious problems that
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 might encounter.

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task response
In task response, keep a clear view. Say both sides well and add a strong idea for each side. End with a short view that links back to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
In coherence and cohesion, use clear links. Use simple words to join ideas and show how each idea fits with the next. Keep each idea in a new sentence.
content
Give a few exact facts or small facts to back ideas. Small facts help the point feel real and clear.
structure
Good layout with an intro, body, and end.
content
Clear view of both sides.
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Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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