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some people fail in school but end up being successful in life. why do you think that is the case ? what is the most important thing to succeed in life?

#people #school #life #case
In the 21st century, human
life
 is more complex,
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where as
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 a group of people succeed in their
life
 without being a good academic background. in
this
 essay, I will explain my opinion and major tips for
success
 in
life
.
To begin
, there are many people
they
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who
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 are
success
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successful
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 in their
life
 without
a proper grades
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proper grades
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 in school.
for example
, in India majority of the prominent politicians are illiterate or
failure
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fail
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 in their schools. but they are
success
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 in their leadership and even they
are control
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are controlled
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.
firstly
, practical knowledge is different from academic score because without
a
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proper experience no one can apply it properly.
secondly
, taking
challenge
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 brings people to create a new world in their surroundings.
Thirdly
,
life
 is mixed with sorrows and challenges,
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where as
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 overcome these problems win the race of
life
.
in addition
, most of the failures in
school
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the school
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 system followed
these principal
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this principal
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 in their
life
that is
 why they are winners in their
life
. Apparently, self-realization is the key point of enhancing abilities because understanding our own qualities make perfection in any job.
on the other hand
,
self confidence
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 helps to overcome challenges
on
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life
 and brings
new
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 path for task achievements. admittedly, more practice
make
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 more
success
 in their
life
 in spite of any difficult conditions in
life
. for an illustration, Alfred Einstein did more than 2600 times of practice in his theory of condom mechanism
that is
, E = MC square and at
last
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 he found out the
world famous
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world-famous
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 theory. In conclusion, there is a saying bird without wings
similarly
 without hard work no one can
success
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succeed
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.
Life
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A life
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 lesson is more accurate than academic theories
where as
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 everyone needs a mentality to learn
this
 challenges.
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