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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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It is believed by some that nowadays more people are interested in foreign travelling which has a positive impact
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 society, whereas others show opposite view. In my opinion, the positives of the tourism industry far outweigh the negatives. On the one hand, there are several advantages of tourism across the world.
Firstly
, with the growing number of tourists visiting, the local business in the area benefits.
For instance
, it provides local people with better employment opportunities.
As a result
 of it, the lives of the native population become easier due to a steady increase in income.
Secondly
, every country has its own speciality, visiting new places always provide opportunities to
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 understand the culture of different countries from all over the world.
This
 would open a new horizon of life and broaden individuals knowledge in several aspects as well as provides a stable foundation of economic prosperity.
On the contrary
, the negative effect of frequent travelling around the globe should not be neglected.
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, local authority faces challenges to maintain the cleanliness of the area as littering is a basic problem of tourism.
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, the increased expedition has been linked to environmental damage, Coral Reef in Australia is facing devastating
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people prefer flights to get to the final destination, the percentage of air pollution is worsening.
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, international travel is undoubtedly one of the fastest ways to carry deadly viruses into a country and the result of the is devastating, which is recently experienced all over the world. In conclusion, exploring
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new places has mostly a positive impact on humans, provided sufficient care is taken to keep the pollution level at a minimum.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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