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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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An argumentation says that living abroad and has pressure to be able to speak a foreign
language
 might be a reason for crucial social problems. I strongly disagree with
this
 notion because of two reasons: people can improve their foreign
language
 skills rapidly, and they could enhance their adaptation skills and have broader connections.
Firstly
, Living and speaking in a foreign
language
 could help us to develop our learning skill of learning a new
language
 and word structures significantly.
Furthermore
, being in a
country
 with a native speaker of the
language
 will definitely boost our skill of speaking and listening. Even though the pressure would be unavoidable and we might stressing out because we could not speak fluently at
first
, it can be a great challenge for us to fight the situation, especially if we have a support system from our surroundings like friends or neighbours in that
country
 and not alone. We could master the
language
 much faster than if we only learn from books in our
country
.
Nevertheless
, Strong mental and support from other people are
also
 important to deal with the situation.
Lastly
, the condition could strengthen our skill to adapt to new habitats and environments, and it could make our circle of friendship larger than before. A new life abroad can not guarantee life would be easy.
However
, every
country
 has people who are kindhearted,
thus
, we might feel more comfortable having conversations with them without feeling down.
Moreover
, they could become our close friends and we would have a wider connection ,even more, we will even feel exultant and not having a social problem at all. In conclusion, living in an unfamiliar
country
 might be hard at
first
, but if we could struggle and enjoy the process, we could gain many benefits
such
 as improving foreign
language
 and adaptation skills
,
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 and have wider connections without having serious social problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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